It's time for our new Challenge - No 37. This Friday June 1, we respond to the sentence, Yes, No, Oh, alright then! Whether prose or poetry, the challenge is yours to write as you will. You can choose to include all the words at one time, or have them interspersed throughout your entry. Or it can be used as a theme of indecision. Whatever your choice, go for it, just don't forget to have some romantic element!
Should I Stay or Should I Go?
Amy ran up to Monica
before the football game started. She
was giddy with excitement and Monica couldn’t imagine what was going on. She already felt as if she belonged, and she
had only met Amy and her friends a week before.
“Dan’s band is having a
party at his house after the game tonight.
Do you want to go? Ryan will be
there”, Amy said, deviously.
Before she could even
think, Monica answered, “Yes!” But wait…she barely knew these people, and
Ryan would be busy playing in the band.
She would end up alone. Maybe she
should’ve said no. As she tried to slow down her thoughts Amy
said, "Ryan really likes you, but he was too shy to ask you himself”.
“Oh, alright then” she thought to herself in nervous
anticipation. She and Ryan had flirted a little the week before. There had been a little match making to bring them together from the beginning. Those who knew them both understood the similarities. Ryan was perfect for Monica. He wasn't like all of the other guys she met with egos ten times the size of their brain. He was down to earth and fun.
Monica was nervous as she
got to the party. As expected, Ryan, Dan
and the rest of the band were busy setting up.
Amy stayed with Monica, pressing her about Ryan. "Do you like him? What do you like about him? We should get together again soon. I will talk to him", she said, barely giving Monica a chance to answer.
As the band began to play,
Monica stood in admiration. Ryan would flash a smile at her every once in a while, with a sparkle in
his eyes. As he did, she felt butterflies in her stomach.
Curfew was coming quickly
and as if on cue, the band started playing The Clash’s “Should I Stay or Should
I Go”. Well, that was the question of
the evening! She knew if she wanted any more opportunities like this, she
couldn’t blow it. Yes, she should. No, she didn’t want to. Oh,
alright then. The band took a break
after the song and she was able to say a proper goodbye…but only for now.
See you then!
Hi,
ReplyDeleteNice take on "should I go or should I stay" and indecision of letting one's true feelings be known to the one person who could mean so much, if only ... ;)
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She got her opportunity. And probably didn't miss curfew either.
ReplyDeleteGreat use of the prompt! I really hope things work out between her and Ryan. :)
ReplyDeleteVery true to life.
ReplyDeletewe all remember days like this--nice writing:)
ReplyDeleteYou even got a song title in there. I hope everyone butts out and Ryan and Monica can get together without anymore 'help'.
ReplyDeleteNice writing on young love. It has me wanting to know how things turned out between them.
ReplyDeleteHi Heather! I'm glad you gave the RFW prompt a go - you've done well. Love the scene and the great musical reference which works perfectly for the prompt. Nice use of the prompt words throughout. It's always sweet reading about young love and its conflicts.
ReplyDeleteDon't forget to pop over to the RFW site Monday to vote for your favourite story. You'll find a poll in the sidebar.
Denise
Hi, Heather. Welcome to RFW. I'd say you are spot on with the theme. I love the way you introduced the characters. Well done. I look forward to reading more of your work.
ReplyDeleteVery clever Heather! You managed to include all the prompts. I liked the way you captured the uncertainty of young love :)
ReplyDeleteOh I liked how one decision naturally brought up another, and another. That is such the way of life. I liked how you integrated all the words to, they felt natural to the character and the situations.
ReplyDeleteThank you for posting for RFW this week. Have a great weekend, and I will see you again on Monday for the Voice blogfest.
.......dhole
The characters in your story are believable, and your story feels like the way life is. You have certainly woven the feeling of indecision well into your text.
ReplyDeleteBest wishes,
Anna
Anna's RFWers Challenge No 37 'Yes, No, oh, alright then.'
Dear Heather,
ReplyDeleteYoung or old, sweet love is a beautiful thing. You are a great story teller. These emotions exist in many hearts. Thanks for sharing dear.
Sunday May 3rd, 2012
ReplyDeleteHi Heather,
I'm back to say thank you for visiting my post. Since you asked what will happen to Carola and Cedric, I will try to write a sequel and put it at the end of the same post.
I'll be back to tell you when it is ready.
Best wishes,
Anna
Oh, the pangs of young love. Nice emotion and description. Passion is such an important aspect in romantic writing.
ReplyDeleteYou used all the prompt words and you captured young love. The only thing I can say is that a little more tension might make the yes-no more provocative and interesting.
ReplyDeleteLinda
Great use of all the prompt words and I love the lines to describe her feelings for him: Ryan would flash a smile at her every once in a while, with a sparkle in his eyes. As he did, she felt butterflies in her stomach.
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